Posted on August 20th, 2009 by admin

What think you of a ‘forked tongue’ poem?

Category: Poetry, Tags: , ,

elyslund asked:


And as inelegantly coarse
You say sang
To my eyes, ears, back,
( insipidly, stupidly )
Everything curling petals
Brown.

Feathers, hail, words
Always always…fall.

Incredibly never loose
Valued tears
Of purpose…

Diamonds should never
Touch the Earth
Again.
Neon…Ya know, you are right. This needs to be about 946 words longer….
heheheheheheheheeee……one day……I’ll just flat do it!!!
Elaine….some wascally wabbit…yeah right….don’t like your liking of big wurds….HA! Let’s take up a collection and get them a dikshuneeeery….hehehehehehehehee!
‘lose’ or ‘loose’…either one will do just dandified!!!
Elaine…dey ain’t supurcilius…dey is TOOPID!!!!

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18 Responses to “What think you of a ‘forked tongue’ poem?”

Ted Hawkinson on August 21st, 2009 5:25 pm:

I like it, especially the last part.

Semper Fi Reborn on August 23rd, 2009 11:28 pm:

Like everything else you do…Splendid!

draggin78201 on August 24th, 2009 7:34 pm:

Sorry, it doesn’t make any sense to me.

Rachel on August 27th, 2009 1:19 pm:

i think its good but put poems online could be easily copied and someone could steal it!!:0

darki on August 28th, 2009 7:14 pm:

i like it soooo :)

sbl09 on August 31st, 2009 4:43 pm:

um…..what?
but i like it.

jeffrey on September 3rd, 2009 10:57 am:

Very thought provoking………I like it!

karran c on September 6th, 2009 1:37 am:

i like it
i no i cant write something that good

Mustafa Leek on September 9th, 2009 6:33 am:

Most touching…..

loboe27 on September 12th, 2009 11:29 am:

I can feel it as it gains speed
falling
terminal velocity

but touched like the wind of emotion

neonman on September 13th, 2009 4:39 am:

I would say you have covered it! “Always, always fall, but not the diamonds again.” “You say sang” was a momentary twister as I read. Maybe you need to work on reducing verbosity! lol Well written.

KingCobra on September 14th, 2009 12:11 pm:

Good one!!!

Sing….sing a song…
Your teeth are like diamonds…they sparkle at night….
Insipidiously…sounds like some bugs mating….
pin your ears back with clothes pins…
Loose feathers cause fluff….
brown petals…like the muddy ones on my bike…
Touching the Earth…we better or we’ll fall off….

Very Imaginative…..eloquent…your play on words…

Snidely has laced the coffee again….with dewdrops of homemade mountain dew…powerful stuff…

Again….as always…
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danial on September 16th, 2009 9:56 am:

Wow.. how could u exert such emotions on paper.. !! Picturing conceptual image on a physical layer . I got the picture ..
Nice..!

Elaine P on September 18th, 2009 3:42 am:

May those diamond tears never again fall. An elegant statement with big words like “inelegantly,” “insipidly” and “incredibly.” I like big words in poems!

Hypocorism on September 20th, 2009 5:51 pm:

I am very sorry; I am not feeling very smart. I am having some trouble understanding the first four lines, and how this is a forked tongue poem. Stanza two is extremely pretty. I have come back to this a few times since you have posted it; perhaps I will get it when I read it again.

Edited; oops, I misread.

ANDREW M on September 24th, 2009 4:15 am:

Ahhh…..Their only $2 & $3 dollar words The $10 words come in the end with ur edit….
Dikshuneeeery That’s worth every bit of $10 bucks…….Add up your 2 & 3 dollar words and what you get is this poem ………….A classic… Worth every cent!!! You’ve done it again you Wascally Wabbit!!………Cheers

cynthia s on September 26th, 2009 3:33 am:

Your words that “always always fall”
serve to teach us well. Thank you this one.

dark bubble on September 28th, 2009 9:37 pm:

Diamonds should never touch the earth. I love that image.